Literacy Autobiographies pt.2

Liam: I love how you throw a lot of seemingly disjointed memories together to recreate your literacy development. I think it's important to illustrate practical learning, like the driving lesson, especially since you came from a working class background. Although my dad certainly encouraged me to pursue academics, the practical education was really the most important at home for me too, so I definitely see its importance. However, I'd like to see you expand on more of those "home" kinds of education experiences in order to keep the opening, which should absolutely not be taken out. I like the bit you say on the second page about how we all have enough experience to write and nothing comes out of nowhere. I think when we have trouble recalling the significance of events in our literacy, like I think we've all had some issue with, we're just taking it for granted a little too much. Great observation. I also like that you value the slowness of your typing because it keeps you going at the same speed as your thoughts. But I'd like to see more of those thoughts on your development, especially at the end where it becomes a little confusing -- that's not where you get to end your history. Great draft.

Caitlin: I was so happy to see all the great detail you added in for this draft! You really started to explore and expand on your memories and opened up a lot of new windows into your earlier years, which we really needed. I don't really know what else you could add, except maybe a little more reflection. I think this essay pretty much contains itself, and that's great. I guess that reflection could come in at the end: maybe elaborate more on what exactly you like about writing teenage fiction? I think, now that you're not a teenager reading this genre anymore, it's important to try to understand what draws you to create more of it. It's something I'm very intrigued by anyway. And of course, I am pretty new to the world of fanfiction so I think it'd be interesting if you explored that a little more too -- though I don't think it's totally necessary to add here. Also a great draft!